Calen says she doesn’t understand the rules of enjambment, (broken phrases in verse). I say you don’t have to – if it feels good, do it… often it feels good for a reason.
Enjambment can be defined as a phrase or clause in a line of poetry that doesn’t finish at the end of the line, but continues onto the next line. For example:
The fat
cat sat on the
mat so what do
you and
the incapacitated decapitated de-ratified
rat think of that
It strikes me that my intuitive friend has an instinctive understanding of the subject, but who am I to argue… so, for the edification of Calen, and anyone else who is interested, today I’m conducting an experiment with word breaks.
I’ve written a whimsical poem about the weather. It includes some enjambment, but to give you an extreme example of the style, I’ve copied and pasted the same poem below, with the lines jarringly re-formatted. You may not consider it a pretty sight, but it leaves you in no doubt as to what enjambment is all about – and who knows, you may prefer it to the original. I’d be curious to know your opinion.
Enjambment is a handy tool – provided it’s used with thought.
Here’s the original, carefully enjambed poem :
This year, a cheeky Summer sun achieved
an eager heat attack in Spring,
surprising slumbering nimbus clouds
while resting easy from
their winter overkill.
The nimbi flew across the azure sky,
attacking basking cumuli as they raged by,
consuming them is if the airy fluff were scattered heads
of cauliflower,
and as they ate, their looming, steel-grey faces
swelled with anger at the scheming rays
that tricked them when their backs were turned.
All through these few unsettled months,
a mighty weight of fights have churned the simmering skies,
with daily victories and tears on either side.
While neither camp concedes defeat,
the days of steaming heat are sprinkled fine between
the weeks of driving rain —
so I would say determined storm has won on points.
Now all too soon, the dog-tired sun
will don her shades for well-earned sleep,
and leave the seasons on default,
to build her strength to to try win the weather game
in next year’s grand assault.
And now – the messy, excessively-enjambed version:-
This year a cheeky Summer sun achieved
an eager heat attack in Spring surprising
slumbering nimbus clouds while
resting easy from their winter
overkill
The nimbi flew across the azure sky
attacking basking cumuli as they raged by
consuming them as if the airy fluff were scattered heads
of cauliflower and as they ate
their looming
steel-grey
faces swelled
with anger at the scheming rays that tricked
them when their backs
were turned. All through
these few unsettled
months a mighty weight
of fights have churned the simmering skies with
daily victories and
tears on either side
While neither camp
concedes defeat the days
of steaming heat are sprinkled
fine between the weeks of driving
rain so I would say determined storm has
won on points
Now all too soon the dog-tired
sun will don her
shades for well-earned
sleep
and leave the seasons on default to build
her strength to try to win the
weather game in
next year’s grand
assault
Remember, the second version is – more than anything – an example of how not to use enjambment. Once you understand the concept, you can look out for better examples, where enjambment is used to advantage, rather than merely to shoddily showcase it.
You can find more about enjambment HERE.
As with all poetry styles, take with what you like, and leave the rest behind. You can write your own rules.
©Jane Paterson Basil
Love the idea of writing our own rules. Too often find true meaning and beauty to subjective and in the eye of the listener or so I would say…
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If poets, artists dancers and musicians can’t write their own rules, who can? The politicians have taken over everything else in the world 😉
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Haha! 👌
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I have never heard of this word enjambment. I think I do it anyway – so I must have written my own rules without knowing that was what I was doing! I like the more subtle original.
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I think it happens naturally when you write poetry, but consciously knowing a technique exists, helps you to use that technique with care – so you don’t end up with something like the second version of my poem :).
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You’re right, it could end up a hell of a mess!
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🙂
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I thought I knew what enjambment meant – and amazingly I was right! Really intteresting examples here Jane. And I love the poem – spot on for this summer 🙂
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Thanks, Lynn. The word enjambment bugs me. I used to think it referred to a traffic jam, and yet there’s no similarity between a traffic jam and this style of poetry. I can’t see its connection to a jamb, either.
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We’ll have to ask a French man what the connection is. Do you have one handy? 🙂
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Certainly not – I don’t have a man of any description 🙂
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And may to stay that way as long as you’re happy 🙂
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As before, both Poem are Awesomely Great! But I think again, the second has more zealous with Emotional Vigor. 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Thank you. It’s hard for me to compare them, since I wrote the poem …
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I love the enjambment device, it can be used with a powerful effect, often surprising or funny, like with your cat and rat poem!
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I like to use it, but, sometimes it carries me away, and I go too far 🙂
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Thank you for this post. I think I still have yet to get my mind around it, but going to go have a look at that link. Seems to me when I was doing the poetry class this was one of the things that hung me up and I quit!
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I remember growling a bit over enjambment when it came up in the poetry course – it was made to sound so difficult!
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No matter how you write it down isn’t it the reader who sets his own cadence? Readers make their own rules too.
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I agree. That’s one of the pleasures of poetry.
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